Friday, April 17, 2009

A Critique For John

John asked me to take a gander at these studies and give my opinion.They are pretty good. John has a good eye. I only have minor criticisms:

1) The contrasts in the proportions have been toned down a bit.

The faces take up a bit more space in John's heads than they do in the originals. Angles and lines of action are slightly less extreme than Harvey's.

2) The finished drawings are less organic - less flowing.

the lines and shapes should wrap around the forms more gracefully and less stiff.

3) I can't really see the constructed forms underneath the first one and that leads me to suspect that John might have just copied these by eye using the negative shapes as guides, and not constructed them first. And then drew in the construction lines afterwards. I could be wrong; that's just what it looks like.

I wouldn't think that if the details flowed more around the bigger shapes.

I should be able to see the head shape all the way around under the hairs, ears and shoulders.

same with body shape, feet, anything that is a form.




Next: How the Insect Lost His Tail

8 comments:

Niki said...

It's still pretty amazing though, I'm still on Porky cause of school.

Ryan G. said...

Good drawing John!

Here's something for ya John K..

TREAT!

John said...

Thanks for giving me some tips John, it's a real honour -
I'm gonna do more of these and take what you've said on board!

Trevor Thompson said...

Yes, how DID Ren lose his tail?

Michael said...

I'va always wondered how Ren lost his tail. Souds like an intersting story!

Hryma said...

Did it happen from when George docked his tail in 'Dog Show?'

Willem Wynand said...

Wow john these are great, i think your right tho, the first one was without construction, and the second made use of construction.
But i actually liked john versions better which hasn't been the case with other studies i have seen, the bit bigger faces. jerry is truely enjoying himself in the bottom pic, with the slighly bigger hear and face..mmm delicious lol good work

Ahahnah said...

It looks challenging having to plan out the position of all those forms.